At the end of my honors history course, I was asked to write a paper about the most significant person, or thing, through out all of history. To execute this essay I had to first define the importance of the word “significant,” and how it would be represented throughout my paper, then I had to explore all that I had learned for the past four years of history classes,and find something that impacted my life. Once I elected the most significant person, I had to create a timeline of event that were inspired by the person, and then conclude that without each of these moments, or people, the world could not, or would not have been the same, thus creating the most significant person throughout history.
Then to effectively convey the significance
The holes of interpretation were expected to be filled in with the questions of us, the students. Questions that were asked, and answered were mostly about how to complete Chicago format. Also, the entirety of the essay was expected to be completed at the collegiate level to please the instructor. The instructor is profoundly educated in the social sciences, so this was another reason to why the timeline of the paper had to extremely accurate. With all of this in mind, even with a free form prompt, the expectations of this essay was to the highest extent. From past papers written for this class, I knew how to write my paper to please her, the instructor. I had to leave no question unanswered, and no thought incomplete, so the reader could finish the paper without doubt in the fact that the person I chose was the most significant person throughout history. While trying to provide accuracy to the instructor, a strong command of rhetorical devices was necessary. Ethos was built in showing that I could be responsible enough to research my prompt with great detail, pathos was also used often to pursue the audience into believing my point of view,then the use of logos was writing the paper in chronological order. With all of the tools on hand to complete this essay, the final thing needed was a quiet place, with a decent amount of space. In the first steps of
A mistake I made was spending too much time on research, and not enough time on piecing together the essay, but it was not something out of my reach. Since I have a strong command in persuasion, I did not have to spend an extensive amount of time when it came to concluding each paragraph with pathos. The toughest part of composing this essay was concentrating on theis. It was very easy to linger in the stories of the people who were influenced my my main character. So, as i got closer to the end of my paper, i realized that I was nearing m page limit, with content still left to explain. Once I finished the draft of the paper, I had to go back to revise and edit to make sure all my major points were included to prove my thesis stated in the first
How is it possible that a single person's actions could change how the world is shaped today? General Henry Knox was one unknown hero of the Revolutionary War who came as an individual and influenced an entire group of people. Henry Knox was the first Secretary of War under the command of President George Washington, one of the few known American Revolutionary War heroes. According to Jack Kelly, author of “Band of Giants: The Amateur Soldiers Who Won America’s Independence,” “Knox was really responsible for the patriots’ first victory when they forced the British out of Boston.” He even served as the first trusted secretary of war and advisor to President Washington for the new United States.
The draft version of the essay is quite offensive, but published version of the essay is entirely defensive. As the reader’s view, these differences are quite clear to
How well known people are effects how influential you are, and while these 2 characters from history are not as influential as LeBron James and trending pop stars are in their time, they’ve used their influential abilities in positive ways that affect everyone today. Susan B. Anthony and Martin Luther King Jr. are both amazing leaders of the suffrage and civil rights movements. Anthony with Women’s rights, and King with African American’s rights took Civil Rights as a whole a few great leaps forward; brought forth an era where the Civil Rights Movement is something almost everyone believes in, that equal rights should be something everyone has. In these great leaps forward, King and Anthony have used their influential abilities to help start, carry on, and pass on a legacy. This is a legacy that is the idea or thought that everyone is equal.
The man with the most impact that changed history was Thomas Paine. He created a pamphlet called Common Sense. Not only did he have an impact, he had a somewhat negative life. His burial was awful. Paines beliefs in religion were different from other people.
The edict was a breeze because I was environmentally crafted into a ruler, but it could be improved upon still. Given the chance to fix it, I would tweak my introduction, make both the introduction and conclusion longer, and give a better presentation and more prepared visual. Whereas, the concept paper yanked my brain out of it’s socket because I struggled with my thesis, didn’t believe in myself, and waited too long to start. I tussled with thesis because each time I revised it, and I still could not see how I would write the essay. I didn’t see a framework or organizational structure for the paper, and even on the thesis I used I couldn’t see it until I found examples to support it. The examples, or lack of during my thesis writing, left me feeling hopeless about the essay. Next time I would find examples in the book first as I craft a thesis. Also, when I was debating my thesis, I should have started writing instead of spending too much time worrying over perfection since I can always return and fix
Many of the mistakes I would have deemed inconsequential in the past resembles glaring flaws now. The introduction and conclusion paragraphs were where the most work was done. In the introduction, I inserted a hook and blended the paragraph together. I accomplished this by adding transition words and changing the tense to fit the rest of the essay. In the conclusion, I completely started over. The original was bland, boring, and just plain repetitive. In the revised version, I outlined the essay, restated the thesis, and ended by suggestion other applications.
The essay is written in a very critical style where the reader will feel like they have been wast...
In my first draft for “Death Constant Beyond love”, my points were vague and seemed to be repeated in different parts of the paper which seemed that I had multiple statements. However, I did a deep analysis through my paper and located the key points of my ideas to create an outline that will drive the reader to only one conclusion, my thesis statement. In this essay I found my weakness but with hard work and multiple writing assignments I improved in a way that now I can focus in only one idea. For instance my thesis statement in this essay was contrasting as I wrote:
I felt that this was the first essay that I had something tangible to write about which made starting it very easy. I think that the most difficult part of this paper was the page requirement, most of what I had to say could have been said in fewer words. I had to drag out everything in the rhetorical analysis, I also went a lot deeper into the history of the speech than I think that I needed to.
Over the course of Intro to College Writing I have written a total of three essays and turned in. These three essays consist of: Narrative, Profile, and Argumentative. My first essay was the Narrative in which I wrote about the night of my mothers arrest. With this essay. I as a writer was trying to convey the emotions I felt during the experience and describe the many atmospheres that occurred throughout the incident. The only memorable thing from this essay was figuring out how to end the essay in a way that wrapped the entire essay back up in a short meaningful, stylistic way. That I felt I did well with my last line being “That was the first time I had said “I love you” in well, I couldn't tell you.” Through writing that last statement I felt I summed up a struggling relationship I held with my mother sparring details that spanned over years into a simple sentence that echoed around the core concept. This was the only breakthrough I met as I wrote this essay recalling the night and describing my feelings flowed easily and I found myself done quickly. I only stopped to find a fancier word or write a sentence in a different way. Either making it longer, shorter or include more details. I had strong feelings that I communicated the entire situation in a comprehensible and touching way. Looking back on the essay there was much too be corrected as I did in my re-write such as: Organization, fragments, Contractions, comma splices.
In freshman seminar, I learned so much that could help me out with any class in college, with maybe the exception of science. I acquired the knowledge of how to write a self-evaluation, a biography, and a resume. Critiquing myself in a self-evaluation is better than trying to watch myself in the mirror and fix my mistakes on the spot. Taking the time to write out notes and learn as I go helps me remember what areas I need to improve in. Even though I gained an excessive amount of knowledge from freshman seminar, I still struggle with writing papers due to uninspired high school classes and the inability to reach into expanded detail. An important subject that was greatly appreciated in freshman seminar was eating habits for dancers. Eating
My RIP companion essay was a complete mess with no structure in the first draft. I believe it was because I had procrastinated to complete both the first drafts for the RIP project and essay. I finished my RIP project then moved on to my companion essay, and the transition was vastly different because in the RIP project I was writing for a different audience than in the companion essay, which was an academic audience. In addition, I forgot that we had been given a prompt with specific instructions and guidelines for the companion essay, which gave the structure for the essay. My professor, Delany-Ullman also points out that “For most essays, you should NOT include your textual evidence in your topic sentence. Your topic sentence should make
However, it is important as a historian, to keep these mechanisms in check and maintain the tenants of historical writing. As evidenced in this analysis, centuries of historians have grappled with the treatment of these genres. Some argue that analysis is superior to narrative and others believe that narrative is the most important aspect of a successful composition. Similar dissent has taken place regarding the importance of biography in history. Whether the importance of the individual or a broader theme in history or a specific event, it seems as though historians should be left to form their own opinions as long as the necessary bones of historical writing
When I first entered high school, I never had any indication that all my expectations would be shortly dissipated. When I thought of high school it had been the whole 90’s point of view where there were the cool kids and the cliques and the bullying and the jocks and so on. To my surprise however, people were more than their supposed position in the system, they were human, they were all free and all- like me, experiencing a brand new start to their lives.
Much like Benjamin Franklin believed, I feel that a person should take advantage of the time the person has in life with activities a person wants to do or needs to do. A person should not spend much time on activities the person does not want to do. Life is way too short to concern oneself with work or other activities one wants nothing to do with all the time. When possible, I try to forget about my responsibility and just let go of the ‘things’ that do not matter to me. I think a person should try to occupy oneself with something productive, worthwhile, or necessary at all times. Even though a person’s life is left up to a person to live, I cannot imagine thinking that I owe my time to society through working a job that I simply despise. I am a compassionate person, but I do not owe anyone anything regarding my time.