Being Overweight: The Positive Aspects Of Fat People

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Second, the author only talks about the positive aspect of the fat, she wrote that:” being overweight can decrease a premenopausal woman’s risk of developing breast cancer and lowers the mortality risk for heart disease patients.” It will leads people feel that being overweight has no negative influence on our health, people will not take any risk to be overweight, which is totally wrong. The rate to be overweight is increasing in recent years, and fat’s negative influence on people’s health is much more than its positive influence. For instance, fat will increase the rate to get coronary heart disease even heart failure because, our heart can’t pump enough blood to meet our body’s need, and high blood pressure is a big issue, our chance of …show more content…

On the other hand, not anyone likes the thin people, different people have their different appreciation of beauty, in my opinion, I think the girl who is too thin makes me can’t acceptable. The author want to help fat people to set up a right attitude to fat, it’s great, but she use a wrong way, Shakespeare said that :”There are a thousand Hamlets in a thousand people’s eyes.” Which means different people have their own opinion to one things, so the wrong way to narrate her means might cause some bad understand of some people, so I think it is …show more content…

I think it is the same theory in the writing and the math problem. When I first read the article, I can not understand what are she talking about, because there are no connection between the ten sentences at the begging of the article, it makes me confused, If I were the writer I will trying to make all the theories show up in an article step by step, from the recipient theories to the hard theories, I will list some authoritative research result to prove my conclusion, and I will write the necessity and the importance of my idea, it will make the article more fluently, so that people can understand the article more

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