Beach Creative Writing

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The motion of the soft, almost fully deflated rubber boat on the edge of the the sand filled beach. [GR - doesn’t quite make sense. It needs an edit. Add words] The sound of the birds chirping and the waves hammering against the rocks woke me from a deep mesmerising sleep. I forced open my eyes from the blinding light because of the sun shining down on my face. I took a look around me to see where I was, all I could see was an abandoned beach of nothingness. I began shouting at the top of my voice ‘Hello, is anyone here!’. [GR - speech should be on a separate line, as so…] “Hello!” I shouted anxiously, “Is anyone here?” There was no one replying only the sound of the birds tweeting and the trees rustling from the winds moving and also hearing …show more content…

It was becoming so dark that I could almost not see anymore [GR - needs re-ordering to make sense. Read this whole sentence 1. Too long and 2. A lot could be reworded] and I was shivering from how cold I had become from the wind and the sun had gone away, I went to find some sticks for firewood. I whittled a stick down to create a fire starter and then built a pile of sticks to make the structure of the fire. Finally I got the fire lit after what felt like an endless amount of tries to get even a little spark. [GR - great sentence, until that last part, which definitely needs rewording.] The fire began to grow bigger and bigger as I was blowing into the bottom of the pile to enlarge the flame. I soon started to warm up from the heat of the flame. I started to become very hungry and really needed to find something to fill my stomach, looking around I thought I'd never find anything at all to eat but finally I stumbled across a bunch of guava plants which was like a miracle to find. I cut open the fruit and when I took a bite I felt like it was the first bite of any type of food in so long, the juices oozed out of the fruit as I took each

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