Comparison Essay, Gain Knowledge Or Make Money?

Right a story is like build a bridge between your imagination and imagination of your reader. Stephen King once said, “Description begins in the writer’s imagination, but should finish in the reader’s. ”. In other words, the writer needs to be skilled enough to create his or her own world and show the reader how to get there. How can you gain this knowledge? The answer is as simple as it can be- practice. As an international student inexperienced in English academic writing, I have struggled with making my ideas clear and interesting. Therefore, after the Assessment test I was placed into English 43. I realized how weak and poorly structured my writing was after the first essay in that course. However, by learning from my mistakes I have

For instance, some areas I improved in were breaking the writing into small paragraphs, condense long sentences, and place clear thesis in an appropriate place. All listed above is inherent to characteristic of a persuasive essay. Although it seems to be plain and simple, but the ability to do it correctly will come only with practice. In the Comparison and Contrast Essay “Gain Knowledge or Make Money”, the original had long paragraphs too many details in it. Therefore, the revised version has shorter paragraphs separated by the topics. The thesis work is to directly state a writer opinion, by supporting the body paragraphs, and answer the prompt if there is one. Nevertheless, in the in-class essay about jock culture “In a Favor of Jocks” my thesis did not answer the prompt and did not represent what I tried to write about. After revision I changed it from “However, athlete are growing up in a special environment that helps them become more prepared for real life and be successful” to “However, there are certain aspects in which jocks are in the lead that represent them from the positive side for example communication skills, fruitful approach to work, and enduring pressure in a stressful situation.”. Changes I have made clarified my idea about this topic and gave the hint on what will be covered in the essay. Although revision is an endless process, I improved my essay structure and made sentences more