The Pressure to Be Thin

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Teenagers constantly worry about their body image, and magazines, newspapers, and television don’t exactly help to boost their confidence. Awkward – sounds at first like they worry about body image and magazines – a very small bump, but avoidable. The portrayal of stick thin woman and body building men forces teens to believe they need to achieve that “perfect” body and look. The biggest issue of these images being broadcasted to teens is the effects that they reference – teens? Another small bump, but recast. have on them. Teenagers who obsess over their body image can experience stress due to trying to impress others, develop an eating disorder, and are prone to neglect, and even jeopardize, important aspects of their lives.make parallel – … due to trying, (due to) develop … (due to) are prone doesn’t make sense. I know you can read it another way – more the way you intended, but when there are a couple ways of reading something, some readers are going to read it wrong. (That may be a record of “reads” in one sentence.) Stress is a part of teenagers possessive – their lives everyday lives. From school, to boyfriends, to keeping up with the latest fashion trends, there is already enough stress to deal with. The construction from … to … to … does not have commas separating the parts To add to it, teens often spend too much time focusing on how they look. Anna Quindlen states that she works out three times a week to keep her husband from looking at younger women (283). Although Anna is older and married, she most likely still felt she needed to stay thin to keep guys interested when she was a teenager. Maybe, but you’re ignoring the humor. All humor has some truth (and pain) in it, but she’s being funny. Reformulate. You can say... ... middle of paper ... ... You’ve gone to quick hits on other topics (tattoos and relationships) that are only minimally developed. It feels like some sort of obligatory list. The images in the media are not going to go away or change, but the way we look at them can. Pointing out the positives in yourself is a great start to having a more positive self-image, and will help you to stop comparing yourself to others. Talking to someone about what is going on is also a big step in the right direction. We are never going to be perfect, but that’s what makes the differences in each of us that much better. Works Cited Maynard, Cindy. “Body Image.” Readings for Writers. Ed. Jo Ray McCuen- Metherell and Anthony C. Walker. Boston: Wadsworth, 2010. Print. Quindlen, Anna. “Stretch Marks.” Readings for Writers. Ed. Jo Ray McCuen- Metherell and Anthony C. Walker. Boston: Wadsworth, 2010. Print.

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