Rocky Point-Personal Narrative

My roommate spends every spring break at Rocky Point and comes back with several horror stories, which means in a way, I understand your pain. Your last sentence made me chuckle, because from the sound of it, Mexico won. The last sentence would actually be a great hook for the beginning of your story. You clearly had many different adventures during Mexico; you honestly could talk about one story and expand on that. In the first paragraph, you had to talk yourself out of being arrested, which is a great hook, especially since you are (from what I assume), not from Mexico, which gives you a unique perspective with boarder patrol. However, I never hear more about that story throughout the text. Obviously, you used persuasion to avoid the ticket,