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Matthew covers many interesting topics in his poem seem to share the common cause of searching for one’s identity. Whether it be reflecting nature like his poem “Summit” or going through a huge physical and psychological change as in “Snow 2”. Matthew has a talent for using both visual and tactile imagery in his poems. He uses surprising imagery and interesting metaphor which can especially be seen in “Desert Snow Globe”. Through these strong images and metaphor, Matthew easily avoids clichés in his writing. In his revisions, I would suggest watching the amount of conjunctions used, like “and” which at times are unnecessary and a bit distracting from the imagery in the poem. Matthew’s line breaks are successful in his poems, however, I feel playing with stanzas to add a bit more structure to some of his poems could be beneficial and perhaps help the reader to break down the poem a bit easier when reading.
The strongest poem in Matthew’s packet I felt was “Snow 2”. The occasion of the poem is transformation, though the type of transformation is up to the reader. The poem describes the gradual transformation of the first person speaker into a type of creature. The first couple times I read through the poem, I took the transformation to be literal, almost cliché, in the way it described a werewolf/ vampiric transformation. However, upon reading through the poem again, because the first person narrator goes through the transformation due to the actions of another, I felt the transformation could be metaphor as well. The use of a physically unreal and impossible transformation to describe an emotional/ psychological transformation. When we are around an individual for a long time, sometimes we tend to pick up some of their mannerisms,...

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...f my poetry. Again, in his revisions, I would suggest watching the amount of conjunctions used, like “and” which at times are unnecessary and a bit distracting from the imagery in the poem. Matthew’s line breaks are successful in his poems, however, I feel playing with stanzas to add a bit more structure to some of his poems could be beneficial and perhaps help the reader to break down the poem a bit easier when reading. I feel Matthew could benefit from looking at how Rosa Alcala uses line breaks in her work, especially, in “Metropolis” and “Patria”. I also think Matthew might consider looking at CA Conrad’s poems like “Signal and Sway” as well as “An exorcism for the hell of it” to add maybe more or a free style use of stanza and line breaks in his poetry. Overall, I really enjoyed his portfolio and look forward to hopefully reading some of his work in the future!

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