Analysis Of Star Child

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When earth’s existence comes under threat from evil forces on a parallel earth, a meek teenager must enter this parallel world to save a spirit that can break a drought on earth.

PETE, father of JAMES, tells his teenage son the family secret: the men of the family are the protectors of the Tree of Life and her daughter, Star Child, who are responsible for life on earth.
When an evil Wizard, We-Neg, captures Star Child, who causes rain on earth, this threatens the existence of humans with a terrible drought. James must take his father’s place and try to rescue Star Child.
Reluctant at first, James becomes the protector and saves Star Child, and he comes to peace with himself and his family.

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In the first ten pages James has a clear goal: save Star Child, which will break the devastating drought on earth. The goal has merit. The stakes are high.
Moreover, he also has the internal goal of growing into a man by finding his path in life, reconciling with his father, and recovering from his mom’s death.
Showing the difficulty of becoming a man is a solid concept that has been used often to tell a tale of fantasy, notably the Harry Potter series and the Transformer movie. Overcoming the many blocks to becoming a man, James is relatable.
The first act competently shows the negatives of James’ world where he’s bullied, insecure, and grieving over his mom’s passing. Now the earth is drying up, creating a serious and strong storyline.
Building up his insecurities early on helps highlight his transformation from weak boy to strong man. Having Ray bully James at school creates sympathy for James. Even better, Pete says that James’ mom Jane: “would be here if it wasn’t for you.”
Making James nerdier at school might help build this image so the contrast to a man would stand out even more. These weaknesses motivate him to show his dad that he’s not a meek boy, but rather one with courage and …show more content…

If understanding correctly, the wizard wants the protector to open the box and the necklace has the power to bring the wizard’s wife back.
In the first act, it’s unclear how the wizard has the ability to contact Pete. It doesn’t feel believable and it makes the structure feel fragmented. Consider cutting this.
Later, Pete has an accident, yet the Tree of Life and James engage in a conversation while Pete is suffering. This doesn’t feel believable and should be re-worked.
As the story progresses, James does open the box, and the wizard’s wife appears, although she’s not the woman he remembered or in the same form. What’s not clear is what motivates the wizard to keep Star Child, if James has done what he asked.
Although the characters are colorful and inventive, making clear what their powers are helps one follow the action. In Transformers, the machines have molecular DNA that can change into another object that it sees. When so many actors can do so many things it can dilute the effect of the power.
Some characters powers are less clear, especially the bad guys’ abilities and the power of the ring itself. The ring can do something with water and sends

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