Agrippina The Younger Thesis

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Deionna, At first, thank you for your sharing your Written Assignment 2 paper with us. I enjoyed reading it. I would like to share my comments with you as below: Intro and Thesis Statement: Firstly, Agrippina the Younger: The Mastermind is a good choice. Your intro looks good, but it needs some more informative sentences for your audience. Your thesis statement needs to be written more powerful than it was. The Body of the Paper: Your literature review is perfect. It looks proper, but you have some grammatical errors as below when proofreading: Nero was only a few years young. Young should be younger. Bibliography and Notes: You need a couple of primary sources for this essay, but I am sure you would add it because you said you have

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