Valarie's Short Story: Discussion Questions

:: Flash Feedback Questions:

1. Does the main character have an external, tangible goal? If not, what could it be? If so, explain why it does or does not work?’

In the beginning of the story, I thought the main character goal was to find a way to finish her last semester of law school. However, I read down a little further, her external goal seems to have changed to her wanting to help the family business, which is unstaffed and struggling. Later, Valarie goal changes again, now Valarie is seeking justice for an incident that occurred, while trying to serve a subpoena to a high-profile celebrity. The main character in this case, seems to be moving all over the place. This story is filled with several goals, in which the main character is trying

Is the conflict specific, unique, and insurmountable? Why or why not? Provide textual support.

The conflict in this story is specific, Valarie is in a financial bind and needs to find a way to recover. While trying to make ends meet, Valarie finds herself in a situation that bought about a conflict between her and a security guard. “Standing in the press section, Valerie waits for her moment. She reaches in her back pocket to grab an envelope, as Black Sun whispers into his jacket sleeve, “We’ve got a situation!” Before Valerie can say “You been served!” here comes Julian, who breaks Valerie’s left wrist. She yelps, “Arghhh!” The conflict between Valarie and Julian is clear and

I think the moral of the story is for Valarie to become financially stable. Valarie starts off in the beginning with financial issue, where she is unable to pay for school. Later, she goes to help her struggling family business, which leads to her getting hurt and suing the Julian for damages and wins 5 million dollars. I believe the point is unclear, because the story takes us through several incidents in Valarie life. 5. How many errors did you find in formatting and/or sentence construction? Provide an example of an error that you found and how to fix it. Include a link to a grammar site that helps you check that you are correct.

There are small errors of grammar, you wrote: Unbeknownst to Valerie there are undercover security nearby. Suggestion: Unbeknownst to Valerie, there were undercover security nearby. You wrote: Paparazzi snap dozens of photos while Valerie cries in pain. She’s stretched out on the red carpet. Suggestion: Paparazzi snapped dozens of photos of, Valerie stretched out and crying on the red carpet. I use this this site for quick sweep: http://www.paperrater.com

6. Does the main character read like a real human being that we care about? Why or why