Speech Reflection: Revised Speech

Speech Reflection – Revised Speech
Strengths of Content I decided to use a mix of chronological and topical organization. I created a balance between what happened and how it impacted me. I aimed for the first part to be more narrative and for the second part (topical part) to be more inspirational (lessons learned). I used a hook in the introduction and provided a preview of the speech while keeping it very concise as to not waste time and shift attention away from the rest of my content. I followed with two distinct section separated by a clear transitional statement. Then, I concluded with a brief and quick overview without being repetitious. In the second, “lessons learned” part, I integrated a short story (my mother being worried) to further make the speech more personal and relatable. I removed excessive detail (compared to the first time that I presented the speech) to give me more breathing room to cover the material at a slower pace (more on this in Strengths of Delivery).

Needs Improvement of Content

The transitional statement was clear and obvious but perhaps I could have changed the order of the two lessons learned so that all of the story telling would take place in the first part of the speech (before the transitional statement) instead of it being injected into other parts as well (although I am not sure that it would be more effective that way or not). I also could have added more imagery to the story telling part of the speech to make it more vivid and engaging. The organization of the speech was good but I could have had more about the lesson learned from the “maturity” section rather than having an emphasis on the