Referring back to my first in class writing, it was poorly written. Though I did answer the questions being asked, I answered it simply, when I could have made it unique and interesting. The purpose of daybook writings are to allow for creativity, as well as in-depth thinking. I clearly did not convey these elements in the first in class writing. Not to mention, I wrote the entry in an informal manner, when my intended audience was you. Thus, I shouldn’t have wrote as though I was conversing with a dear friend about the events that unfolded over the weekend. I should have wrote the entry in a formal manner since I’m writing to someone with authority. I also wished to take note of the fact that this writing spoke of my expectations and goals for this course. Looking back at the entry, everything written holds true. I did end up finding...
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... truthfully believe this was the best paper I’ve ever wrote. After receiving my paper back from you, I made sure to revise my paper thoroughly. I made my conclusion longer, got rid of unnecessary sentences (for example, when I speak of children eating peanut butter and jelly sandwiches in the lunch rooms), moved around the order of a few sentences (paragraph 9), got rid of some incorrect punctuation (this can be seen throughout) and reworded multiple sentences (paragraphs 5 and 7-10). I learned something after revising that paper; that there is no such thing as a flawless essay. After all, without flaws I wouldn’t progress as a writer. Thus, by revising not only did I learn a lifelong lesson, but my writing skills and thinking skills grew. I say that about my thinking skills because when you revise you have to think about where you went wrong and fix these mistakes.
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