I chose to compare paragraphs one and two. Paragraph two is much more effective in giving me pertinent information, in a way that I can understand it. Paragraph two, although it did lack variety in its sentences, was more efficient, and to the point. It was full of facts that can be useful, without too much wordy language. The author of paragraph one would benefit from reading over her work and editing it for content. She jumped around from topic to topic, even within the same sentence. Although paragraph one demonstrated an individuals’ experience with a loved one not developing his end affairs properly, it read as though it was written for a casual audience, perhaps as an e-mail giving advice to a friend. The author of the second paragraph clearly kept an academic audience in mind; this paragraph could also be seen in a business journal and not look out of place. Proper punctuation, spelling and grammar were evident in the second paragraph. The person who wrote paragraph two clearly did his research, and made an effective point in his work.
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In an excerpt of Unteaching the Five-Paragraph Essay," Marie Foley reveals how the Five-Paragraph Essay formula contradicts writing instructor's most basic goals. Foley shows that the formula deters from generating individual thinking. In today's society, essays are used by millions of people in order to express their different ideas. The Five-Paragraph Essay formula was originally developed to help retain the efficiency and clarity of the essay. Foley, however, believes that this process eventually separates the student from his or her written expression and should be used only as a first step tool for beginning student writers. Foley insists that the formula blocks discovery, squelches authenticity and undermines the reader's need for coherence. Foley shows that patterns of organization and more natural thinking can benefit the student.
The draft version of the essay is quite offensive, but published version of the essay is entirely defensive. As the reader’s view, these differences are quite clear to
...ach essay I would say that authors do an amazing job of telling their stories. I do think it would be nice is Brent Staples tell more of how he really felt when dealing with these situation instead of giving just a brief example. Laymon essay was well writing and very understandable I love that he doesn’t tell you what you are supposed to learn from this essay but you make of it what you will.
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Receiving the opportunity to check one of my completed compositions created leverage to strengthen elements of my oeuvre. This reflection consists of a process of dissection, scrutiny, and close reassessment. As a writer in the editing and revision stage, I examined particular features throughout my essay including background information about the topic, credible evidence to support overall claims, and grammar and sentence structure.
he evaluation of the overall rhetorical effectiveness for intended audience was a failure starting with the ethos of having no much credibility for the author, pathos, no real connection to emotion to aid the doctor, and not being able to see the real problem, and with the lack of logos to explain how to be able to obtain aid and help the student improve. As a result, in the editorial the authors had no success in persuading all the audience. For that reason, college students should be able to see the correct way to write their essay and the effective method for them to pass class with excellent essays.
- GOOD COMPARISON, BUT BREAK PARAGRAPHS DOWN OR TAKE OUT SOME REDUNDANCIES OR MINOR DETAILS. ALSO, YOU REALLY NEED CITATIONS
Throughout this semester I have written several essays and journals using techniques both important and unfamiliar to me. This class helped me use these techniques and steps that are involved in creating and formalizing an essay. The writing process of an essay includes information gathering, creating ideas, and writing it on paper to create a cohesive and organized paper. In complete certainty I can say I lack many of the skills necessary to create such a paper, but during this course I have learned some writing methods which I believe have improved my essays. The essays and journals in this portfolio reveal both my strengths and weaknesses in my writing and how I have both continued to make the same errors and improved in other areas.
In this essay, I attempted to combine two sources and analyze them each by itself first and then combine it at the end. I think I did a good job analyzing and interpreting what Ellen DeGeneres was saying in her article. This essay was more difficult than the other essays for me because it is hard to apply the examples and try to combine two different sources to make a compare and contrast paper make sense.
will be included in each specific paragraph. This will help to avoid getting off of the subject and
The assignment was to compose a long essay arguing the effectiveness of one essay over another using how the author uses the rhetorical appeals as evidence. Michelle Obama’s “Bowie State University Commencement” speech conveyed a message that people should value education and also enrich the lives of others with knowledge. However, Stephanie Owen and Isabel Sawhill present the essay “Should Everyone Go to College? The essay gives numerous statistics based on arguments of whether college is the right decision for everyone and which majors have negative financial repercussions. Obamas use of the rhetorical appeals were much stronger and persuasive to argue that we should value education rather than Owen and Sawhill stating that college is not the right decision for everyone. When composing this essay I created a chart dividing the two and putting down how each used the rhetorical appeals then I began to write. After receiving my graded document and reviewing my peer reviewed document I fixed comma splices, clarified my topic sentences and also fixed grammatical
Summarize what you think is the most important information in the article. You should include details and examples from the article. Also, identify any inferences or conclusions that this article makes.
Over the course of Intro to College Writing I have written a total of three essays and turned in. These three essays consist of: Narrative, Profile, and Argumentative. My first essay was the Narrative in which I wrote about the night of my mothers arrest. With this essay. I as a writer was trying to convey the emotions I felt during the experience and describe the many atmospheres that occurred throughout the incident. The only memorable thing from this essay was figuring out how to end the essay in a way that wrapped the entire essay back up in a short meaningful, stylistic way. That I felt I did well with my last line being “That was the first time I had said “I love you” in well, I couldn't tell you.” Through writing that last statement I felt I summed up a struggling relationship I held with my mother sparring details that spanned over years into a simple sentence that echoed around the core concept. This was the only breakthrough I met as I wrote this essay recalling the night and describing my feelings flowed easily and I found myself done quickly. I only stopped to find a fancier word or write a sentence in a different way. Either making it longer, shorter or include more details. I had strong feelings that I communicated the entire situation in a comprehensible and touching way. Looking back on the essay there was much too be corrected as I did in my re-write such as: Organization, fragments, Contractions, comma splices.
However, while writing the argumentative essay, it took much more than just asking myself a simple question. Since the topics of my body paragraphs were so diverse, I was forced to work harder at picturing the connections between all three of them. While I knew writing the process essay was difficult, when I began writing the argumentative essay, I knew it was going to be much more challenging. Nevertheless, after the paper was finally complete, my ability of writing transitional sentences was increasingly better due to the difficulty. Furthermore, I never would have examined so closely how to relate the ideas of college athletes’ monetary compensation to lawsuits being filed over disputes of unfairness (“Paying College Athletes” 3). Not only did the process essay help further my knowledge of transitional sentences, but the argumentative pushed it to the next
This stood out to me for a variety of reasons. Empathizing with the idea that a client may seek feedback and advice from the counselor, I was confused and disagreed that a counselor should refrain from such actions. This initially did not sit with me well because I am a naturally indecisive person and when faced with a difficult decision, I will seek the counsel of others. I appreciate the wisdom, perspective, and insight they have on a situation. It often frustrates me when people will not outrightly tell me what they think I should do or what they would do in my situation.