Reflection Paper

analytical Essay
1791 words
1791 words

George Singleton said “You do not have to explain every single drop of water contained in a rain barrel. You have to explain one drop—H2O. The reader will get it.” Ever since I started writing in school, I was always taught to explain my point. Why are you writing the paper, or story. Why should anyone care to know about your paper? When I was little this was not a problem, I could just write the exact words… In my paper I am writing about….. (Subject / story). Then write my story very simply, then for my conclusion of the paper it would say why I was writing the paper, usually including the prompt I was given, or why the story was important to me and my life. Then it got a little more complicated as we learned more writing techniques. Writing …show more content…

In this essay, the author

  • Explains that they have been taught to explain why they are writing the paper, or story, from a young age. writing became more complicated as they learned more writing techniques.
  • Opines that making connections with is important when analyzing something to connect your own personal experiences to it. they add commentary to make sure that the reader connects with what they are writing about.
  • Narrates how they struggled with quoting and making clear connections and a clear point with their content of their paper and the conversation with .
  • Analyzes how they felt choppy and unfocused in their first essay, "why can't i just express myself?"
  • Analyzes how they used foucault better, but struggled to have a real conversation with him.
  • Analyzes how they struggled with the same thing in their third essay, "the college major match". they added facts of woman's wrestling to use as a metaphor like griffin did in her writing with cells and missals.
  • Opines that connecting with an audience is important because they have to understand where you are on a topic. connections are important in everyday life.

Gonzales and a CLA, Tyler, that I defiantly had at least one strong point, but also had some unanswered questions. I did not communicate with my audience effectively. I felt my paper was very choppy and not very focused. I was trying to include all the reasons for why and how I did not like writing papers for my high school English teachers. Instead I should have been explaining why I thought writing did not need rules and why my past teachers might have thought that we needed these rules that they were telling us about. Also my quotes I used of Anzaldua did not really do my paper any justice, they were just kind of there. They did not make the connection I was hoping for, or the connection I was trying to make. I knew in my head what I wanted to say, but did not know how to explain it in words. But never fear my writing got better! In my second draft, “Why can’t I just express myself”, I wrote, “Sometimes when I couldn’t find anything, I would make assumptions. When I did this I was giving false information. I would feel really bad for this, almost “shameful” for not providing my reader with an accurate representation of my feelings of the topic. Anzaldua expressed that she “cannot accept the legitimacy of [herself]. Until [she is] free to write bilingually” (30). She “no longer [wanted] to feel ashamed of existing”, as I no longer wanted to feel ashamed of myself for wanting to write how I …show more content…

My first draft was very confusing. I changed a lot in my second draft to try to help make more since of the point I was trying to get across. I added facts of woman’s wrestling to use as a metaphor like Griffin did in her writing with the cells and missals. I attempted to write my paper like Griffin wrote hers, I did not make a clear connection of my italicized facts and my story. I knew the point and connection I was trying to make, but I did not make it clear to my audience. In all three of my essays I struggled with the same thing, but in each of the things I struggled with got a little bit more clear. Also in my third essay, “The college major match”, I said, “Every on in Griffin’s narrative has secrets. Everyone has a side to them that no one knows about. You cannot see this side of them, “[it is a] kind of a mask, not an animated mask that expresses the essence of the inner truth, but a mask that falls like dead weight over the human face, making flesh a stationary object,” not all secrets on this side are good (237). Griffin has many secrets, as does Himmler and all the other people whose stories she shares in her writing. These are the type of secrets you wouldn’t want anyone to know, not even your very best friend. This mask the people are wearing, you will never see it. My grandfather on the other hand did not have a secret, but he did have a different mask on when he was

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