Mr.Klingenberger, The 4th in-class essay we did was different from the previous three about a good something. It was about whether or not high school years are some of the best years in your life. It came as a surprise to me because it was a topic different from the others. So I had a bit of a rough start. I took extra time thinking about my high school years, and what awaited me in the future. I had lots of evidence for my paper.In the first paragraph, I wrote about how hard it is to work everyday after you complete your education. Afterwards, I wrote about the difficulty of making friends after you are done with your education. I finished the paper a few minutes before the bell rang. I turned it in thinking it was missing something.When you gave us our grades, you later told me that I needed to have stronger warrants.I received a 4 on my 4th in-class essay which was better than the class average. Which I would try to work on in my …show more content…
Simple enough prompt I thought. But when it was time to write it down I wasn’t sure of what to talk about. I wrote down 3 global problems on the planning sheet and thought about what I could use as evidence. The one that I thought had the most supporting evidence:poverty. So I decided to use poverty as my problem. I started the intro with a story but as I started my first paragraph, while writing it I thought you know what would be cool? Having my whole essay be like a story. That was what I did, and it was a bit risky. After turning it in I thought, that was such a bad essay. Maybe even the worst in the class. I was doubting the risk I took.When I got my essay back I was relieved to see that my risk was worth it because I got a 4. I still had the same problem as the fourth one though. Also, my essay didn’t have enough evidence because it was a story. I’ll be sure to fix up these problems in my sixth essay I
High school is meant to be the time of your life, but for most seniors just like me it can be some of the most emotional and crazy time. The things in my past make me who I am today, and the things I do now are the first footsteps into the future. I’ve learned a lot about myself in these past four years, and I still have so much learning to do. This is my high school story; the good, bad, and the ugly.
This is one of the best essays I ever wrote. It was also the easiest and quickest to write because I had fun doing it. It was amazing how much my writing improved when I decided to have fun with it. "Forced" writing never turns out well no matter how skilled the writer is.
It was the fourth year of my school carrier. In other words, the year of truth if I would make the cut to the higher education track. I was nervous because I knew that I would be capable of going this route, but I the feeling of concern was stronger because I haven’t had performed very well in my fourth year so far. At the end of the school year, I received the shocking news that I didn’t make the cut to go to the school which would have had allowed me to go to University later on in my life. I was sad, disappoint in myself, and lost self-esteem in my educational abilities. At this time, I was more embarrassed then able to realize the real benefit of a system which early on tracks children’s
Writing is a difficult and complex process which requires dedication to master. Even with all the time in the world, no final draft is going to be perfect and there are going to be a lot of bumps and bruises on the path towards your perfect essay. One must prepare to sit in complete isolation and a room with dead silence so frightening that you can hear your own thoughts. My time throughout Composition I has been an experience in which I finally put together all the aspects of writing such as integrating quotes, using present tense, expanding my vocabulary, and pinning down my grammatical errors. The grade that I deserve is an A because I have taken small steps to improve my writing and it has shown in my grade.
The class divided into groups of four and edited each other’s rough drafts. The activity was an eye-opening experience because their comments towards my essay assisted me while I created the final re-draft. Several of the comments were positive and pointed out that the structure, organization, and examples given were well done and thought out. This feedback gave me a sense of satisfaction with my essay. I was thankful that one of the reviewers pointed out that the thesis was missing at the end of the first paragraph. The thesis that I constructed was placed at the beginning of the first paragraph. I rearranged my sentences and added a proper introduction to correct the structure of the essay. The editing took a while, but I was pleased with the final outcome. Without the peer review process I would not have noticed this major mistake. With future essays, I will be turning to my classmates for advice because hearing feedback from other points of view is helpful. I will consider every comment that I receive, knowing that working on them will allow me to produce a higher quality of
Waiting with anticipation to discover my defining moment, the moment that makes or breaks each student in the class, our final. I sank down in my chair wondering if I would pass or fail the college level English class that I had struggled with all semester. Our teacher walked into the classroom, wearing his usual white pants with a blue collared shirt and a red bow tie. He grinned as his eyes peeked over the rim of his bifocal glasses, as he casually walked to the other end of the classroom. My heart sank into my chest while his words sizzled off his tongue, "ESSAY." He then began to inform us that the essay should have at least one book source and 1200 words of information on a topic given. Everyone in the class moaned because people never use books any more. It seemed ridiculous to most when the information is just a click away.
Most people writing this type of essay would talk about their high grades, athletic performances, or other academic achievements. That’s not my story.
I had been waiting for an essay to be assigned to us. But, by the second or third week, we had not got an assignment. A month passes by and we finally got our first assignment that I had been dreading. It was for an essay. I was nervous because I had not wrote a paper in thirteen years. I didn’t even know where to start when it came to writing an essay. But with the help of a very good friend and my English 98 teacher, Dr. Evans, they showed me that I could do it and how not to stress over an essay.
The first day I walked into Freshman Composition I had the idea that everything assigned was going to be extremely frustrating and difficult, as this is a college class. Equally important, my expectations for the class was to earn at least a B, further my writing abilities, and learn more about college. As the semester started, I noticed that my writing was not at the college level and I needed to learn how to improve it. Along with improving my writing, I was also able to learn about college life. With this essay turned in and handed back, I began to realize my writing needed practice and critiquing. Furthermore, I gave myself goals to achieve in Freshman Composition, I have learned useful tools to improve my writing, and I have learned more
Without reservation writing my Narrative Essay was by far my favorite writing assignment of the term. I struggled with the Persuasive Essay a little more than then Narrative, however I did better with the Persuasive Essay. For the Persuasive Essay, I struggled most with transitioning from one paragraph to the next. I also had a couple grammatical errors, however not as many as I have had in previous writings. I was ecstatic when I got my grade back from my first draft of my Persuasive Essay because of the feedback I had got on my thesis. My introduction paragraph which contained my thesis
I continue my service work at SME, in the same classroom helping Ms. Alonso in the engineering classroom. It is a separate classroom where kids come once a week to build something which gives them opportunities to participate some hands on experiences. Kids are brought to the engineering classrooms by their classroom teachers, however the classroom teacher does not stay for the engineering class. I assume it is either a break for the classroom teacher or they just work on to get ready. I have gone to SME 8 times since I turned in journal #1. On my first journal I have mentioned that signing in with the new computerized system was problematic. I got used to signing in at the office, however most of the times computer is not working for checking
My writing had improve from the beginning of this course to the end of the course. I had ups and downs writing all of my papers for example paper 3 I consider it was the hardest paper I had to write during the semester. The only problem I had during this semester it was that I never went to get help to improve my writing. What I had learn was that almost everyone struggle when it comes to writing a paper. Most writer have their strengths and weaknesses when it comes to writing. My main weaknesses as a writer was that I never look for help always done everything by myself. Also, that’s one of the main reason why I had struggle writing Analyze essay. For paper four I was very happy because I had gotten many suggestions and ideas for the last paper by my family and friends during the last few week of the semester. Another, weakness that I had during this course was not being confident of my work and not understanding what the text used to mean in a different perspective. By, the end of the course my strengths as a writer I had improve a lot. Now I can analyze any text and understand what it meant in different
This class is one I thoroughly enjoy. With our use of the skeleton, by movement, and by videos, I can say I have learned quite a bit on movement. I’ve learned safe and healthy ways of movement which reflecting on it I wasn’t aware of before. You keep a very light and open attitude to learning, and you keep a nice pace for the class. I like how the learning is fun and if we’re not getting something you come up with a new way of trying it out.
Learning to further expand my knowledge of how to properly write a college essay has been a fulfilling journey. In high school, advance placement English was the most pivotal class for me because it required me to think and perform on a higher level. I felt as if I could I mastered how to convey my thoughts into a essay, but after receiving my first college English 1101 grade back, I realized I did no master the skill as well as I thought I did. I received an eighty on my first paper, this was a huge shock considering that I received all A’s on all my English papers in high school. My grade was justified considering I made plenty of broad statements like “The color choice used by Rosenbaum is genius”, and did not give further explanation on the statement. Luckily, Professor Gallagher offered extra credit if I submitted a post write reflecting on what I did well and what I can improve on. Though the extra two points on my paper was fantastic, the
But the fact of that matter is that I was honestly didn’t give a crap about school. Who on rare occasions would actually show up to my classes. This was partly because I didn’t find any interest in going and partly because every time I went to school I felt constantly attacked by the people at my school. I was the target of the bullies. It made my life miserable for me. More importantly the majority of classes I chose to skip were my morning classes, I didn’t go to my morning classes because I felt that my sleep was more important. My teen years were an odd time for me, my family and I moved three times. (Morning Edition) I started as I said before in Indianapolis, Indiana later moving to Michigan then to Birmingham, Alabama where i went to a boarding school, Indian Springs School in Indian Springs Village. and finally I moved to Orlando, Florida. Traveling was something I liked but hated also at the same time it’s hard to go from place to place going from having friends to having none at all. My constant anxiety didn’t help me much either. The constant struggle of finding worth and meaning in my life and I felt like I felt that in writing so I finally started applying myself to school. While in College however I applied my whole self to the material I was given I seemed answers to everything. The world the people in the world life it was a huge question mark to me still is but I got a further explanation of many things throughout College. I went to College at Kenyon College and graduated in 2000 double majoring in English and Religious studies. (Newsmakers) I left my dream of being a preacher to pursue my dream of being a writer. My English teacher told me that my writing wasn’t very good but the stories that I told to others was where my talent was and if I worked on that skill that’s when I could quit my job as a chaplain and begin my