Sadie,
I enjoy the way you write. It is clear, concise, and you remain aligned within your thesis. I think you do a great job running the king through Frye’s different archetypes. However, in that section you clump Aristotle in the middle of your Frye explanation. I would keep the Aristotle info in the essay because it is relevant. However, I think it would flow better if you introduced Aristotle in the beginning of your Frye section. Explain how Frye is walking in his footsteps. Also, later in the essay you introduce catharsis, but do not give a good explanation.
A couple of stylistic things that I noticed is that you use the word thus many times. I think sometimes you take that word out of context and need to use it when it is necessary.
Throughout literature authors have written to express a message to their intended audience. This is no exception for the plays, Oedipus Rex and Darker Face of the Earth, written by Sophocles and Rita Dove, respectively. The similarities in plot, characters, and motifs are not the sole concurrencies between both plays; the overall message to the audiences in both plays is one in the same, one cannot escape their fate. Sophocles and Dove both illuminate this message through their use of the chorus. While Sophocles uses a single chorus of Theban elders, Dove illustrates the grimness of fate through several minor characters: the chorus, the prayers and the players, the rebels, and three female slaves. Dove’s usage of Phebe, Diana, and Psyche further accentuate the battle between free will and fate, as well as the role of women, a concept absent in Sophocles’ play.
In the year 1625, Francis Bacon, a famous essayist and poet wrote about the influences of fear on everyday life. He stated, “Men fear death as children fear to go in the dark; and as that natural fear in children is increased with tales, so is the other” (Essays Dedication of Death). Clearly, external surroundings affect perceptions of fear as well as human nature in general. Although C.S. Lewis published the novel, Out of the Silent Planet, over three centuries after Bacon wrote his theory on fear, Lewis similarly portrayed external surrounding to manipulate perceptions of fear. From the first chapter of the novel, Lewis revealed fear to be a weakness that leads to ignorance. It was this ignorance that apparently fueled the cycle of corruption and immorality on “The Silent Planet.” Using the character Ransom to reveal the effect of memory and morality on fear, C.S. Lewis demonstrates that fear is a quality of the “bent” race (humans), and only by eliminating fear in our lives can the human race become hnau.
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This essay earned a 89/100. it was a lot of work considering the lines from macbeth for textual support.
Breaking rules is what makes humans learn. This is what David Levithan interpreted in his 322-page fictional novel, Every Day. David Levithan uses characterization, vivid imagery, and irony to convey to readers that systems don’t follow rules.
Here I have a comparison of my quotation using in my prior essay and recent one, between final draft of Singer Position paper and my rewritten of it. It can clearly show us the difference between them and the improvement I have made. First, in the final draft of Singer Position paper, I did not do well in the organization, format and explanation of a quotation. I wrote，“ What’s more, Singer holds an opinion which is that living high and letting die. As what the end of the story Bob says, ' The child is killed. For many years to come, Bob enjoys owning his Bugatti and the financial security it represents.' In such short words, Singer greatly satirizes Bob’s behavior which is heinous. It is possible to say that Singer feels a little bit helpless about human’s nature. He pointed out that selfish gradually change and control people’s mind.” I show the original sentence and analyze that Bob who is character in the reading material did a wrong decision for his selfish. However, the most important thing I lost is to rephrase the original sentence. Also, the format is terrible. I even forgot write down the page number. On the other hand, I decided to ask my instructor if I can rewrite it, I began to write a quotati...
In the essay “Everything Now” Signs of Life in the USA: Readings on Popular Culture for Writers, author Steve McKevitt blames our unhappiness on having everything we need and want, given to us now. While his writing is compelling, he changes his main point as his conclusion doesn’t match his introduction. He uses “want versus need” (145) as a main point, but doesn’t agree what needs or wants are, and uses a psychological theory that is criticized for being simplistic and incomplete. McKevitt’s use of humor later in the essay doesn’t fit with the subject of the article and comes across almost satirical. Ultimately, this essay is ineffective because the author’s main point is inconsistent and poorly conveyed.
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A few days later a woman died while giving birth to a child. A diviner
During this school year I have learned a lot. My writing has evolved in the following ways. It was changed in the way that I don’t write as scatterbrained as I use to. My process as changed in the way that I think gives a better final project. And I found something that I think is interesting about my writing. So without further delay let's take a look.
Overall the direction is clear, it seemed that the flow was a little off. I didn't see a thesis statement. By creating a solid thesis statement with 3 main points, the main point paragraphs
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organization, and word choice. All other essays were critiqued by my peers. With the help of
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