The feedback that I received improved my work because it helped address more details about the setting, character and tone. “I do think that maybe a little more description of Wallace” This next couple sentences really helped me bring the story together in such a short piece. “Also, maybe you could throw in a short memory of one of her previous murders, such as her first one. I was curious about her friend, Bonnie, since she is imaginary does that mean that Charlie has been diagnosed with a mental disorder or is undiagnosed? What led to her becoming a serial killer?”
By using these questions to guide me in my story I was able to explain more details and give the reader a way to relate to the main character. Another way that I used my feedback is when the instructor helped me carry the tone from the beginning to the end of the section. “I think I commented before on the blatant address of the reader in the opening, and I think now that we have some more writing to look at, it feels even more out of place, because it doesn 't carry through the next section. I think it would really be as simple as not saying "Hi" at the beginning.”
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...not have to be fact, they can be completely made up and I think that’s why I chose this form because I can think out of the norm. My interest in the supernatural and fantasy have let me to focus on this form. I have been a Harry Potter fan since the books came out and my goal is to write something that even compares to that.
I think my selection said about me that I am a dreamer. I think outside the box and do not like to settle on the normal reality. I like to create things and make something that will never exist and give it life. If I took this course again I know that I would write fiction. I would write a completely different book and get new opinions on so it would set me up to be able to write a great book. I know that I will focus my writing on fiction. I feel that is where I belong as a writer, so anything I can do to strengthen that area is what I will do.
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