However, to be successful with a tried and true concept, they should offer the audience something new or refreshing to excite the viewer. The script attempts to do this by giving the main character, Savoie, an intriguing backstory – the death of her husband. The idea that she was a suspect and that she left her former police department to begin a new life, is interesting. This attempts to give Savoie some depth.
Unfortunately, the current structure hinders the plot. The first act sets up the murders and Savoie’s goal to solve them. However, there really isn’t any major inciting event or catalyst that propels the story from act one to act two. They tend to blend together. In fact, the real inciting event in her life is the murder of her husband, which occurs before the plot begins.
The script remains goal-focused, as the protagonist investigates both cases. The third act offers resolution and reveals the killers.
The other concern about the structure is that the scenes are dominated by dialogue vs. action. There are numerous scenes of Savoie interviewing various witnesses and suspects, but the story lacks strong physical action and movement that excites the audience. Watching scene after scene of Savoie interrogating witnesses isn’t exciting or stimulating. This actually impedes the pace of the storyline. The story requires movement and more thrills. The suspe...
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...it appears the story is set up for a possible TV series or franchise movie, but the murders presented in this script, just aren’t emotionally engaging enough and the tension isn’t compelling enough to sustain the plot.
In addition, the professional presentation needs to be polished. There are numerous formatting errors and some typos. For example, it should be Dr. Anderson, but he’s often referred to as Dr. Cliff. Cindy Johnson and Lyndon Johnson share the same last name. The transitional elements can be eliminated. The parenthetical elements also should be eliminated (they are not always properly used). There’s some wrong spacing in the formatting. There are also missing scene headings when a character moves from one location to another.
In summary, the protagonist has a strong backstory, which is very workable, but the current structure, hinders the storyline.
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