In Beavan’s writing I believe I see: simple, compound, complex, and compound complex sentences. I think Beavan uses a good mixture of these types to help develop his points and keep the reader interested. I feel that if all his points were made in simple sentences, people would get bored easily. Also if Beavan choose to only use compound complex sentences the paper may seem too much for many readers. Beavan uses a good mix in my opinion. I believe he uses compound sentences the most in his writing or complex the most in his writing. I might be wrong though I only vaguely remember what these sentences structures actually mean. For my sentence structure in my paper I would say is manly composed of simple and compound. I didn’t intentionally plan …show more content…
Most of Beavan’s paragraphs are relatively small. Beavan doesn’t try to over load any of his paragraphs with too much information. This I believe helps the reader continue to read without getting tired. If the paragraphs were extremely long the reader may feel tired. Beavan has seamless transitions from one paragraph to the other. This also helps the reader keep on tract and not causing confusion with a fast switch out of nowhere. I would like to go over the third paragraph in on page 142, starting with “Since 1950” (Beavan, 142). The first thing I would like to point out is in this paragraph I see simple, compound, and complex, and compound complex sentences. I had previously mentioned I think this is an effect way of keeping the reader interested. If there was to many simple sentences the paragraph would be very dull. The paragraph is very precise on what it is trying to tell the reader, U.S. gross domestic product growth doesn’t guarantee happiness. I really like how the paragraph ends with a question that would make the reader think about everything they had just read. I think this paragraph was well done. For my paragraphs I need to work on being more concise. I need to include better transitions from one paragraph to another. I could also work on shorting my paragraphs, I usually tend to write long
Another revision technique that was suggested was “sentence outlining” which involves summarizing each paragraph of a writing into one overarching sentence in order to improve the cohesion of the piece (Harris 450). Introducing these techniques can allow readers to utilize revision in their own writing and form their own stance on its effectiveness. With revising the conclusion of a piece, Harris’ advise is to look ahead rather than to rephrase what has already been stated (Harris 454). Revision is expected to extend beyond the piece.
Despite Burr predominantly using medium to long sentence length, most of her sentences are simple and loose. This gives the paper a childish, immature quality, reminding the audience that she is still ten years old while also giving the entry the informality
The paragraphs are organized in a chronological way. He begins by explaining the dusty living conditions, the small living area, and the space he is sharing with 9 others. He then goes into the hygienic part and explains how difficult it is to be awaken at 0400 with the urge to use the restroom and having to walk a thousand miles over loose gravel that seems to be cold as ice to do so. The way the passage is written allows the reader to walk through the experience with the author. He makes the reader feel like his shadow, following him through his
Writing is hardly ever done with just one sentence. It is a combination of sentences that all have to coincide with one another to reach a goal of clarity. "A series of clear sentences can still be confusing if we fail to design them to fit their context, to reflect a constant point of view, to emphasize our most important ideas. These sentences could all refer to the same set of conditions, but each leads us to understand the conditions from a different point of view," (Williams, 45). It is always a good idea to start out small; take a sentence and make is clear. This then needs to be applied to groups of sentences together to make the whole sample of writing clear.
Write a paragraph discussing a passage that inspired you, made you think, or frustrated you,and how it did so. The paragraph should be between 160-300 words, and you should cite the page number of the passage.
The text was written with reading out loud in mind, that can not be recommended; but it is suggested that the reader attend with his ear to what he takes off the page: for variations of tone, pace, shape, and dynamics are here particularly unavailable to the eye alone, and with their loss, a good deal of meaning escapes. (87)
When an essay is scattered, it exposes the author’s difficulty to construct the paper which will cause the reader trouble to understand the main ideas of the author. Although there are errors in my introduction and conclusion, my body paragraphs display the organizational patterns that should have been used throughout the essay. For example, paragraph four starts with a clear main point, provides relevant information with two separate examples, and then ends by linking it all to the thesis statement. By providing a well-structured paragraph, the reader was able to read with ease and follow the flow of my idea. When the time comes for writing another timed essay, I will remember to create an essay with easy movement by referring to the M.E.A.L structure.
The narration is broken up into paragraphs of various lengths, all of which contain long and detailed sentences. E...
will be included in each specific paragraph. This will help to avoid getting off of the subject and
In contrast, syntax provides a new perspective to the narrator s behavior as sentence structure draws attention to her erratic behavior. By her last entry, the narrator s sentences have become short and simple. Paragraphs 227 through 238 contain few adjectives resulting in limited descriptions yet her short sentences emphasize her actions providing plenty of imagery. The syntax quickly pulls the reader through the end as the narrator reaches an end to her madness.
In a literal sense, No Impact Man, is Colin Beavan’s journey of creating a strategy to live simply and in doing so helping the planet. Rather the essence of the novel is how during his journey, Beavan discovers the true faults of our society; the evils of materialism and consumption.
When I went through my essay, I first noticed that the sentence structure I used was strange and confusing. With limited writing practice, I was unable to put clauses and prepositional phrases in the right place in a sentence. Sometimes I put too much information in one sentence but did not arrange it in an order that was easy to understand. When I was reading sentences with unusual structure, my thoughts jumped between phrases. Thus, I believe readers will have to put extra effort into understanding the sentence, which interrupted their understandings of the essay as a whole. If I were going to revise it further, I would rewrite long and complex sentences into short but clear ones. For example, sentence...
This essay received an "A." This essay's greatest strength is the writer's use of sophisticated syntax, employing phrases, and in dependent and independent clauses, modifying the main clauses, and creating a rhythmic reading pattern.
This paragraph is not too bad. It has some good ideas about narrative theory and ties them with Boswell's work. It should be followed by a clear explication of these ideas with examples drawn from various texts to make specific points.
Dr. Shook’s critiques directed me to revise for the lack of transitional phrases between main ideas within my essay, as well as my tendency to compose run-on sentences. Accordingly, I inserted transitions that connected the major points that my essay touched upon. In order to do so, I used phrases such as “furthermore” in order to create a better flow without compromising the important ideas that were essential in regards to properly communicating the context to my audience. By commencing the process of revising my first essay, I developed the understanding that one of my shortcomings as a writer at the beginning of the semester included compiling numerous ideas into one sentence, consequently making it too “heavy.” By taking corrective action, I separated sentences that surpassed three lines into two entities. I found that Informal Assignment 10: Writing with Clear Style, assisted in improving my understanding of how my style of writing assists in communicating to my audience. Initially, I failed to realize that clear communication is of the utmost importance in regards to becoming an astute college writer. I entered English 101 focusing on incorporating words with over three syllables to intelligently convey my argument instead of focusing on how clearly my argument will be received by my