A common goal for many writers is to connect with their audience. In Conor Lynch’s essay the goal was to invite the reader into the magical world of Disney (“Shining Shimmering Splendid”). Unfortunately due to the author’s lack of preparation and prewriting the invitation was lost in transit. The author also regrettably was unable to transcend himself into the viewpoint of the reader making him ineffective in connecting with his audience. For an essay to be effective in conveying a message to the reader it is imperative to always draft an organized outline and to put the author at the same point of view as the reader to avoid any confusion.
Organization is an ordered manner; where the author uses structure or a formulaic pattern to aid in the daunting task of preparing a well written essay. Some examples of organization in the prewriting process are outlines, brainstorming, journaling, webbing and clustering. As a writer
organization has always been my biggest struggle in overcoming literary adversities. For example when I wrote “Shining…” my idea of organization was to write the essay without using any form of organization through prewriting. Instead, I chose to just cram out a paper and then go back
and make any corrections that I found after proofreading. This self developed asinine organization tactic had ultimately led to the demise of my organization and the ease of reading my essay made my paper ineffective in communicating my message to the audience. One example that led the reader to the breakdown of my essay was when I wrote the description of the key lime pie I ordered at Wolfgang Puck’s restaurant, “….just the way a key lime pie should be but with a dab of something else” “Shinning...” (Lynch 4) it was pointed out that while I discussed the key lime pie at Wolfgang Puck’s restaurant, I lacked development and clarity of my idea which made it hard for the reader to follow. Another example of this clarity issue was when I wrote “The park itself is broken up into 7 distinct areas which include themed rides for the genre of that area”. Again I should have developed this statement with more description in the prewriting process to give clarity and flow to my statement. The reason I bring up these two examples of where my paper lacked clarity was to show how I could have easily resolved the problem if I would have organized my thoughts and ideas using a detailed outline during the prewriting process. Furthermore I feel that when I create a detailed outline it forces me to take an idea or thought and expand on it by supporting my original idea. For example, instead of writing “just the way a key lime pie should be but with a dab of something else”, I could have supported my idea by saying “that something else was a creamy mango sauce that had been lightly drizzled on top of the desert.” Upon realization of how vital organization in the prewriting process is to the effectiveness of my essay, in the future I now plan on providing the reader an organized essay via a detailed outline from the prewriting process.
Organization is important but also being able to give myself the same point of view as the reader is equally as important when trying to write an effective essay. When I proof read correctly I am trying to take the place of the reader which allows me to objectively critique my essay, as well give myself the same point of view as the reader. When I am capable of doing this, I am able to indirectly correct where I may have clarity and flow problems. In fact when I am able to successfully insert myself into the same point of view as my reader I am exceedingly more effective in connecting with the audience as well. For example, I am able to recognize what areas of the paper the reader would benefit most from hearing as well as answer any questions that the reader may have. During the process of proofreading this paper however I was unable to put myself at the same view point as the reader and therefore was unable to successfully convey my message of how magical Disney World truly is. An example of my inability to put myself in the same point of view as the reader is when I wrote, “The theme parks are constantly filled with people tantalizing aromas, and sounds; that create an atmosphere that you don’t get anywhere else in the world.” After re reading this objectively I have realized how underdeveloped the statement was and how I left the readers senses pathetically under stimulated. This undoubtedly left the reader shrouded in mystery. The reader’s confusion could have easily been remedied if I would have done my proofreading more objectively answering any questions that the audience may have had when reading this section of my essay. For example, I could have explained that, “the tantalizing aromas were from the wide array of food stations ranging from freshly cooked Chinese food all the way to hamburgers and hot dogs fresh off the grill”. Alas instead of effectively tantalizing the readers five senses, I shamefully crushed the flow and clarity of my paper while abandoning my responsibilities to deliver a clear cut message to my reader. I have now devised a plan to combat my inability to insert myself in the reader’s point of view; I now plan on taking a much more rigorous approach to proofreading. I not only will read my paper objectively but I also will reread my paper multiple times to effectively communicate my message to my reader.
This self analysis
of me as a writer was not only informative but also prescriptive in offering a viable solution to overcoming my literary follies. My ultimate goal as a writer is to effectively convey my message to my audience. To be successful at achieving my goal, I must develop an organized outline for prewriting and then I must objectively and rigorously proofread my essay from the point of view of my reader. As a Wiseman once said the pen is mightier than the sword but without support or organization the pen will surely fall.