In Beavan’s writing I believe I see: simple, compound, complex, and compound complex sentences. I think Beavan uses a good mixture of these types to help develop his points and keep the reader interested. I feel that if all his points were made in simple sentences, people would get bored easily. Also if Beavan choose to only use compound complex sentences the paper may seem too much for many readers. Beavan uses a good mix in my opinion. I believe he uses compound sentences the most in his writing or complex the most in his writing. I might be wrong though I only vaguely remember what these sentences structures actually mean. For my sentence structure in my paper I would say is manly composed of simple and compound. I didn’t intentionally plan …show more content…
Most of Beavan’s paragraphs are relatively small. Beavan doesn’t try to over load any of his paragraphs with too much information. This I believe helps the reader continue to read without getting tired. If the paragraphs were extremely long the reader may feel tired. Beavan has seamless transitions from one paragraph to the other. This also helps the reader keep on tract and not causing confusion with a fast switch out of nowhere. I would like to go over the third paragraph in on page 142, starting with “Since 1950” (Beavan, 142). The first thing I would like to point out is in this paragraph I see simple, compound, and complex, and compound complex sentences. I had previously mentioned I think this is an effect way of keeping the reader interested. If there was to many simple sentences the paragraph would be very dull. The paragraph is very precise on what it is trying to tell the reader, U.S. gross domestic product growth doesn’t guarantee happiness. I really like how the paragraph ends with a question that would make the reader think about everything they had just read. I think this paragraph was well done. For my paragraphs I need to work on being more concise. I need to include better transitions from one paragraph to another. I could also work on shorting my paragraphs, I usually tend to write long
Another key point, is to break the writing into sections, so it is easier to understand and grasp what the author is arguing about. It is for you to describe the text and be able to put it in your own words or summarize
With an evident attempt at objectivity, the syntax of Passage 1 relies almost entirely on sentences of medium length, uses a few long sentences for balance, and concludes with a strong telegraphic sentence. The varying sentence length helps keep the readers engaged, while also ensuring that the writing remains succinct and informative. Like the varying sentence length, the sentence structures vary as complex sentences are offset by a few scattered simple sentences. The complex sentences provide the necessary description, and the simple sentences keep the writing easy to follow. Conversely, Passage 2 contains mostly long, flowing sentences, broken up by a single eight word sentence in the middle. This short sentence, juxtaposed against the length of the preceding and following sentences, provides a needed break in the text, but also bridges the ideas of the two sentences it falls between. The author employs the long sentences to develop his ideas and descriptions to the fullest extent, filling the sentences with literary elements and images. Coupled...
The “Northwoods Journal”, is about Jim Brandenburg’s quest that takes place in Ely, Minnesota. Brandenburg wanted to challenge himself by taking one photo every day for 90 days. He will not have a second chance to change his F/stop or shutter speed to get the photograph correct. In the “Northwoods Journal”, he has many strong paragraphs, but the one that stood out to me was paragraph three. Brandenburg uses three writing strategies, descriptive words, sentence variety, and prepositions, to create a strong paragraph and engage an audience.
However, though John Warner’s argument is strong, Kerri smith’s argument is stronger. In Kerri Smith’s article “In Defense of the Five-Paragraph Essay,” She claims that the five-paragraph essay should stay taught in schools as a guideline for a well-structured essay. She explains the five-paragraph essay as an “introduce-develop-conclude structure” that even great expository writing follows this structure (Smith 16). She purposefully communicates to her audience this idea to show that this structure gives students the knowledge and capability to write a professional essay. The five-paragraph essay includes the three key points to have a well-structured and organized essay. By mentioning that other great writers use this form of structure, she creates a stronger argument as to why the five-paragraph essay is important to education. She continues her article by explaining her early stages of writing and how she was taught; over time, her teachers would show her new ways to improve her writing which, in the end, she was told to think “of those five paragraphs simply as a mode of organization” (Smith
Samuelson’s writing style is very informative, but he delivers his information in a brusque, rough way that makes the facts difficult to absorb. Samuelson writes the way others argue or yell- practically shouting the information, as if
Another technique Franklin uses to maintain the audience’s attention is her sentence structure. She uses very long sentences throughout paragraph 4 and has 2 short sentences in the middle of the paragraph.
The second body paragraph was exceptional, however, I think I could have done better on the transition. I didn’t just restate the story, but I explained what both Odysseus’ and Shrek’s home meant to them and why they
In Chapter 8, the author Marquis R. Nave illustrates how important sentence structure is by pointing out a few important things when forming sentences adequate to use in your writing. He starts by saying that lucid and efficacious word usage to form sentences in writing becomes vital when you need to write papers in a higher education institution. Once the scholar grabs control of his or her ability to communicate their message to the reader lucidly and efficaciously they gain the power to an improved and ordered thought process. Now a person can start to search for new ways of using dialectal to communicate their message in a way not usual to the norm. A scholar only has the power to govern their writing when they correctly put together
My analysis over the development of my writing throughout this semester. I will assess many aspects of my experiences with English 1301 up to this point in the semester. I will explain the ways by which I have blossomed as a writer during this time. I will provide brief examples of my work to show what I am basing the evaluation of my writing on. What my conceptions of writing were, at the start of, the semester and compare it to what they are now. I will clarify how my work this semester reflects the concepts of writing and reading we have been working on and studying in class. I will tell about what and how particular reading assignments have been influential in my growth of creative ideas. Lastly, my interpretation of what it means to be a writer, and how my experiences this semester has influenced my opinion on writing.
Writing Arguments. Fifth ed. of the book. Ed. John Ramage, et al.
The transitional phrases lead the reader into the next paragraph by maintaining their attention with concepts from the previous one.
These weekly readings slowly taught me how to analyze the structure of different essays. Through the journal essay assignment I came across to a particular essay that grabbed my attention. The essay, “Why Bother” By Pollan, allows the reader to be moved by his written work, and teaches the different techniques to grab the reader’s attention. In his work, Pollan describes people attitudes regarding climate change and he offers possible solutions if people attempted to help. For example, he says, “Sometimes you have to act as if acting will make a difference, even when you can’t prove that it will.” (Pollan 317) In other words, Pollan gives the reader a chance to engage in his work by offering a solution to a problem that’s well known. As I read this essay I focused on some of his quotes and reflected their meaning in depth. Most of Pollan’s quotes were a source of motivation to those who may lack in hope an inspiration to make a difference. For my journal entry I focused on introducing evidence that supports my interpretation from the quotes. For example, Pollan says, “Gardening is a process of social change, and by doing so; it can impact others to make a difference”(Pollan 318) I decided to include other quotes from the reading because this supports my interpretation of the reading. After, I found out that this technique helped me go in depth
The style of the essay changes tone from the first four paragraphs which leans toward a formal style; the formality is mainly due to the lack of “I” statements and first person point of view. The conclusion paragraph switches to a less formal almost conversational tone. ...
When I went through my essay, I first noticed that the sentence structure I used was strange and confusing. With limited writing practice, I was unable to put clauses and prepositional phrases in the right place in a sentence. Sometimes I put too much information in one sentence but did not arrange it in an order that was easy to understand. When I was reading sentences with unusual structure, my thoughts jumped between phrases. Thus, I believe readers will have to put extra effort into understanding the sentence, which interrupted their understandings of the essay as a whole. If I were going to revise it further, I would rewrite long and complex sentences into short but clear ones. For example, sentence...
Dr. Shook’s critiques directed me to revise for the lack of transitional phrases between main ideas within my essay, as well as my tendency to compose run-on sentences. Accordingly, I inserted transitions that connected the major points that my essay touched upon. In order to do so, I used phrases such as “furthermore” in order to create a better flow without compromising the important ideas that were essential in regards to properly communicating the context to my audience. By commencing the process of revising my first essay, I developed the understanding that one of my shortcomings as a writer at the beginning of the semester included compiling numerous ideas into one sentence, consequently making it too “heavy.” By taking corrective action, I separated sentences that surpassed three lines into two entities. I found that Informal Assignment 10: Writing with Clear Style, assisted in improving my understanding of how my style of writing assists in communicating to my audience. Initially, I failed to realize that clear communication is of the utmost importance in regards to becoming an astute college writer. I entered English 101 focusing on incorporating words with over three syllables to intelligently convey my argument instead of focusing on how clearly my argument will be received by my