Mary Kate's Synthesis

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1. Mary Kate Lambert “No title was given”. Mary Kate’s paper was unfinished, however, she did provide a good topic sentence for the introduction paragraph. In the second paragraph she needs a much stronger topic sentence. Also, there were grammar errors such as incomplete sentences, capitalization errors, word usage errors, and to be verbs. Overall, I think that she is off to a good start and that her final paper would be better if she includes these suggestions. 2. Jourdan Green “The Literary Impact of Being Born vs. Captured into Slavery”. Jourdan’s paper was unfinished, however, the information she provided in the introduction and second paragraph was great. The grammar errors she had was one run-on sentence and I think if she rephrase

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