Describe The Relationship Between Ella And Ruby

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I really enjoyed reading your story! I think you did a good job of moving through time in your story. Often, when there are large stretches of time between scenes in a story, I feel jerked around as a reader. However, I think by keeping the setting of the diner the same throughout the story, you were successful in jumping months at a time in order to move your narrative along. I also really liked experiencing the diner during different seasons and at different points in Ella’s life. I felt like I got to really know the tone associated with the setting of the diner, and I got to see Ella and Ruby develop as characters. Nice job! In comparison with Ella and Ruby, the other characters are fairly flat. I don’t think it is necessary to flush them

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